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Just a few little things like:
Always centering the text makes people go back and check who said what because nothing is truly indented. (I have done this throughout all four chapters)
Also, even though the story is great and you are just trying to establish characters, you don't want to focus on the monologue for both characters. Give them more to think about such as the décor in the room or how the lights sparkled in her eyes or something more than repetitive text.
Another thing is do you have any other big twists to the story?? Don't explain them here but I am curious and I cant wait to hear the rest of the story! :D
Just a few little things like:
Always centering the text makes people go back and check who said what because nothing is truly indented. (I have done this throughout all four chapters)
Also, even though the story is great and you are just trying to establish characters, you don't want to focus on the monologue for both characters. Give them more to think about such as the décor in the room or how the lights sparkled in her eyes or something more than repetitive text.
Another thing is do you have any other big twists to the story?? Don't explain them here but I am curious and I cant wait to hear the rest of the story! :D
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Btw at the end it would be cool to list as many witty names as possible :D