Hey, I know I've been horrible for not posting, lately I've just been editing what I have, but I am getting back to writing and I hope to have another chapter up soon! Thank you for commenting, I didn't realize people were actually reading :)
I'm sorry I didn't post yesterday. There's a virus going around my school, so of course I had to get it too. Yay -_- but better late then never! I hope you guys like it :)
Oh my gosh I am an idiot. Everett's last name is supposed to be Daniels... Why did my brain write Rosenfield? That last name is from a different story I'm writing xD
OOH whats your wattpad user? also, just some REALLY simple improvement, watch your tenses because you switch from present "i hear a rustles in the bush" (i hear rustles or a i hear a rustle) and past "if I believed in such miracles anymore." i dont know if its just me but i think past tense is more natural cause most books are written as "were 'verbing'" and "she 'verbed'"
Thanks so much for the corrections of the tense! I'll make sure to watch that! and my wattpad is http://www.wattpad.com/user/undiscovered_artist I only have up the rest of chapter one so far (it didn't all fit on witty in one quote). Working on chapter 2 now.
I Love it already!
Hahah, Jk, Nicole! :D