sunshinestories

Some of your wording was a little awkward, and the story progressed too quickly. I guess if you go back and beef it up it would really be great! You paint nice pictures. I can see exactly what you're trying to say. I would really love to read more. I would also appreciate it if you help me out, too. I'm writing short stories on my tumblr (bhgonzalez.tumblr.com). Read them and tell me what you think on my witty or through messages. :)

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