xoxLoveStoryxox

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JustMe888 1 decade ago on quote #1813232
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i know the feeling :/ sorry you feel that way! just stay strong with what ever your going through right now. it can only make you stronger & i know its true because i learned it my self! if you ever want someone to talk to or vent to, im here! btw your really pretty (:
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tennillewest5 1 decade ago on quote #2784565
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hello frienddd
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Slc_Dissottle10 1 decade ago on quote #1477889
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I love this.. its so good. :)
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xoxLoveStoryxox 1 decade ago on quote #2784565
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Haha?....
Why'd that make you laugh?
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karleigh15 1 decade ago on quote #2784565
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that made me giggle..... the part when you said more than yourself
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x0Sayum0x 1 decade ago on quote #1477889
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wow, this is amazingg. amazinggg woorrk!
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xThatLittleSceneKidx 1 decade ago on quote #1477889
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That is really awesome!!
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MelyClaire 1 decade ago on quote #1777157
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exactly.my/thoughts.
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dora101 1 decade ago on quote #1477889
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you r a great story letter!!! i love to write storys but i dont think mine r nearly as good as yours your word choice is absolutly fabulous!!!i feeel like in there! :) keep writing!!!!!!!
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TheHippieNinja 1 decade ago on quote #1477889
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I love you Tiery. That's so flipping good.<3
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xoxLoveStoryxox 1 decade ago on quote #1477889
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Thank you so much! I love you ;) You weren't mean about it or anything but you actually told me things that I could do to fix it.
Yeah, I noticed the one of the grammar mistakes after I posted it, and was just too lazy to repost it =/
But I will be sure to fix everything.
Thank you =]
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peaceinpieces 1 decade ago on quote #1477889
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the last two sentences are a little corny... maybe consider rewriting?

i love the second sentence. it's magical, and i can picture that, which is perfect. a writer should always make a reader picture something.

I love your ideas, your word choice, and the overall feel i get when i'm reading it. i feel like i'm there.

there are a few minor grammar mistakes, such as "it's"; you might want to google and find the rule, for future reference. you also have one sentence fragment: "But found nothing besides disappointment." it's a good phrase, but should be combined with the sentence before it to make it a complete sentence. :]
i would suggest starting the first sentence of the third paragraph as "Cianna sat down at the table.." instead; it makes it clearer that she hasn't been sitting there through the whole time this takes place.

good job. keep writing. the more you do it, the better it gets. also, reading a lot helps your writing enormously. :]
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