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Moments Chapter One Lauren's POV I ran outside freezing my

Moments
Chapter One
Lauren's POV

 

              I ran outside freezing my *ss off! I kept looking at the text Liam sent me. I jumped in my car and drove to the hospital, watching for ice. I ran into room 108 floor 2. I burst in and Niall was on the bed laughing. "NIALL! What the f*ck happened?!" He smiled. "I wrecked the car. No one was injured." I could see he broke his right ring finger. "NIALL JAMES HORAN! You need to watch yourself!!!" I yelled loudly, and then I broke into tears. I couldn't stand seeing him hurt. He stood up and made me look him in the eye. "I'm fine, really Lauren, I promise." I hugged him tightly
              Harry chuckled. "Niall she was really worried. She wearing slippers and pajamas!" I rolled my eyes and looked at Louis and Zayn. "Could you guys do me a favor? I'll ask you later, when no one else is around." They nodded. "I need to go home now, see ya guys, Niall one more move like that and I will make sure you ALWAYS have someone with you!" As I walked out the door Zayn grabbed my arm. "Hey could you give me a ride home? I came here with Harry." I nodded and walked on. It takes an hour to get to the guys appartment building. We got a block with absolutely no words.
             "Lauren?" I raised an eye brow, not taking my eyes off the road. "Zayn?" It can't be anything important right? "Christmas is next week(sorry if you don't celebrate christman) what do you think Alyana would like?" I smiled and turned the car. "Lauren where are we going?" I kept going and we stopped at the mall. He nodded and we walked in. "So what's your budget Zayn?" He shrugged. "Around three or four hundred..." I got wide eyed. "Wow...she must mean a lot to you then, I don't ever get anything over 5 dollars from a guy." He nodded. "Yup she is." I could tell he was thinking something but I didn't know what.
                 We bought shoes, cloths, and I pitched in and we got something really really special for her. "Zayn, help me with something for Niall please?" We got things for a bunch of other people and we got down to Niall. I got him the shoes he's been wanting, cause his are all sh*tty. They cost $200.
              When we got into the car we turned on the radio and turned on the radio. WMYB came on and I turned it up really loud and we sang along to it. we pulled up and took the bags inside. We walked in and turned on the lights. "What took so long?!" I screamed and Zayn laughed at me. "HARRY! If you must know Christmas shopping, I got something for you, you, you, and you. And you know everyone else." I smiled at Niall. "And yours caused me to go broke!" He half smiled and I laughed.
              Erin walked in. "Harry I am cleaning today, want me to clean your closet?" He smiled. "I was actually wondering if you wanna go out on a date with me Erin, you're beautiful and I really think I love you!" I smiled. "He's smooth Erin." She smiled. "That was what he said when he asked me out the first time." I smikled. "He's a keeper if I had a boyfriend like that I'd NEVER let him go..." A tear slipped and I smiled. They both smiled and me and walked out. I sat on the couch, Zayn sat beside me, Niall on the other side, Louis on the floor infront of me and Liam stood behind me. Zayn was the first to talk. "What did he do to you?" I knew he was talking about my ex. "Well, when? We first started going out? After the last of my family died? When I started working and couldn't see him often? When he cheated? When he had kids with another girl? When he proposed and never told me anything?" I was bawling at this point. I talked the whole time about what he did to me and how he had hit me a few times. I held onto Niall and cried. A while later I was holding onto Zayn and was yelling now.
         I fell asleep on Zayn's couch. It was a good day gone bad, but atleast I can wrap gifts tomorrow!

 

SORRY IT WAS SO LONG, usually the first ones are short...and I'm sure it bored your brains out! :/ FEEDBACK YA'LL...IT'D BE NICE :)

10 Comments

RosieGraceBlack 1 decade ago
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love it!!!! :)
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hcbook 1 decade ago
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what are u talking about girl? you scared the living begebers out of just by saying laurans was going to the hospitol! Personally i love it :)
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SheDreamer 1 decade ago
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nice beginning, but you overused the word
"smiled". your word choice needs some word, and the fluency is choppy near the end, after she walks into the apartment and screams. after that, i didn't understand what was happening at all.
hope this helps!
-SheDreamer
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Hold_Me_Closer 1 decade ago
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i really liked it! i was just a little confused on who was talking sometimes...but it was rle good:D
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[deleted] 1 decade ago
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Yay i liked it c:
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ymv28 1 decade ago
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AMAZING!!!
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0xandie0x 1 decade ago
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i know its the first chapter but im liking it already
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erinnn 1 decade ago
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This is so good :)
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lemon* 1 decade ago
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hi, can i be your editor? c:
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onlyifhestheone 1 decade ago
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hey! i know you haven't gotten a lot of faves but it seems like its going somewhere and i actually wanna read it! okay. feedback: PROOFREAD! its a little hard to understand when you mix up 'and' with 'at' and you don't use correct punctuation. (not trying to sound mean) and maybe use a cooler format...also be realistic since youre writing about 5 guys who so many girls obsess over. But DON'T BECOME TOO CLICHE about them, i hat that, like do you think Louis actually sits around talking about carrots all day? or that you'll walk into a room and find Zayn admiring himself in the mirror? noooo....just some stuff that annoys me in 1D stories I've read. hope i helped! if you need any help i'm here i love english class (but no i do not write in perfect punctuation and spelling when im just on the web making comments:p) keep it up!bye:)
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