My speech on bullying; (which I will be presenting to my whole

You are an incredible writer!! Your speech is really moving and i know it will get to people! keep up the amazing work and i love the ending and everyone else will too lol

Wow thats was amazing I wish I was as brave as you! Btw I love the ending!

Wow that's like an amazing speech!!! And the ending is like the best ending ever lolz

I'm loving the ending &I believe you are being incredibly brave staying this speech to your school(: but I think you should make the speech longer &talk about the seriousness &how sad it truley is not just that everyone is worth it in stuff like that ! Hope I helped, good luck<333

thank you.. c: i may just go on with it during the actual presentation.. like, wing it along with this. :)

omg this is absolutely amazing!! you're such a role model and are beautiful inside and out. us wittians love people like YOU!

I love the ending! Hahaha(: it's adorable but try and make the beginning just a little bit more formal, not too much. it can still be light and happy before you go into the heavy stuff. That's really all I have to say! The rest of it was amazing and I'm sure you'll do great(:

tehehec; thank you for feedback(:

You're welcome!(:

I love it and I personally think your "okay"s and "right"s and stuff make it sound less rehearsed and more personal. love it

I just got chills reading this. That is amazing and i hope lots of people find their light. That will change lives.
It's really stupid, to be honest, that making someone else go to theese extremes, can make someone else so happy. Think before you speak.
Good luck, don't be nervous, there's absolutely no need with a spech like this. :)

you r awesome... wish u could come to my school and read this .... <3

Its super super good but 1 thing: you mentioned how rates of suicide are more than 50% now and if you stop bullying it will go to 0%, I just wanted to say that you should word that alittlw diffrently because bullying isn't the only cause of suicide, and there still will be people who commit suicide if bullying is stoped for different reasons. Just a comment:) everything else is super good though!!

This is so beautiful. you're so inspiring. I'm so proud of you for doing this and i dont even know you. You're so amazing and beautiful. And brave too, i wouldnt be able to stand up and do this without getting bullied after for having a say in it. JUSTKEEPSWIMMING.<3

You don't know how much you inspire me and how truly amazing you are. You are the bravest person I've come across. Stay strong, and good luck! Because you will be famous because of this one day:)

Wow you are so brave :)
Knock 'em dead on behalf of all Wittians! <3

I like your message, but your language makes you sound casual, like you don't really know what you are trying to say. Words like "okay", "oh", "yeah "and "so" may be perceived as space fillers by your audience. Space fillers will make it sound like you are making up your speech on the spot rather than conveying coherent thoughts.
Sorry if that sounded mean, but I want people to know what you want to tell them. I read your other quote about what happened at the talent show and I think you are so brave for standing up the bully in front of so many people! It sucks that you got detention, but you are making a difference by being yourself, and I am glad that you want others to do the same. Keep going, you have a lot to say and you should share those thoughts with the world :)

I get where you're coming from, but I personally think that using those words makes it sound like she's directly talking to people and being herself, instead of actually acting like she's JUST saying a speech. I think it makes it a bit easier to listen to and relate, but that's just my opinion :)

This is. . . amazing. the fact you have the courage to do this. . . its like something out of a movie. Only it's better because its not.

That's amazing.

You're such an inspiration! :3
Stay strong, you're amazingg! :3 <333

Love it. (: