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Newsboys :)

I love that song. :)

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I loved the hint hint! I understand sweetie, i know it's hard to keep going...its been pretty hard for me too with school starting and me finding out my relative has cancer....But, I'm still going to keep writing. It's just very hard...so i get that :) Take your time get inspired and hopefully start writing again

thank you for understanding, your the only one I know I can count on to understand thanks :)

That makes me feel so special, and I know for sure I can count on you too :)

thanks:) its nice to know that I qualify to be counted on an to have someone to count on

:)

I'm def still interested...its just that i've been going through a tough time lately. So it's been very hard for me to focus

if you need to talk ill listen but its okay if you don't, thanks for all the support with my story

You're def welcome! and if i see you on chat then sure.

notify me! i like this :)

I will and thanks :)

Pure awesomeness

Thanks you don't know what that means to me :)

Your grammar has improved big time! So good job on that...but i don't really know about your spelling since I am a horrible speller my self...haha but good job i like it

thanks:)

OMG i love it! nnice job it's really good. I honeslty have nothing bad to say about it

thank you! So im doing a better job with details then the first one?

So good

thanks :)

Nice ending!

Thanks :)

Amazing story you are a great writer

thanks and you completely blew up my notifications :)

Aww good ending! and remember, when a good story ends and even better one begins :) lets just hope i can finish mine too because i already have like 10 ideas of new stories in my head lol :P

thanks:), and I cant wait to read the rest of your story and ill read other stories you write (ur a good writer;)), but I have no clue which one of my other stories I want to write

I really like it :] please don't stop

thank you, ill give it a little bit, and see I guess I might get inspired

Thank you!

I posted 3 more chapters last night by the way

Thanks C:

My advice is if you don't feel passionate about it then end it. if it still interests you then keep going

I usaually don't feel this story, so it takes forever to write chapters an after I accually write a chapter then I wish I didn't write that or could change it. I think im just gonna end it and start a different one that ive already started. if you want to know the ending to this then tell me I already know how its gonna end

I respect your decision, and just make sure you're passionate about it. :) And let me know what happens to Lyra

I posted two more chapters, I got inspired :) thanks for being so supportive of it

You're welcome and can't wait till you start :)

thanks and I will

I like it. Except, when you are going to write something that is intense I suggest that you would smooth it out just a bit. The beginning of the chapter basically went Lyra's talking-she gets nervous-she can't say anything-she cries-she sleeps.) Next time slow it down, give us details. Maybe share some mysterious flashback. Also, give us some details on the reactions of the other characters because in this chapter we mostly get Lyra's emotions not theirs...you see what I mean? When we read stories we like to imagine them as movies, and it's kind of hard to imagine that as a movie when we only know what Lyra is doing. Other than that I strongly think you made the wrong choice by rushing into the other part so quick. It's like oh Lyra's talking about Drake and now she's eating breakfast with her family. It's too rushed. So take your time slow it down. I know it's hard to slow down because you get bored easily and you're so excited to write the rest that you kinda go over bored. My advice to improve
1: Try reading the story out loud while you are righting it.(This helps you see you're tone)
2. After you're finished writing; read it several times and don't publish until you are a 100% satisfied with it.
3. Add in some metaphors,similes,personifications.
Ex.) "I could nearly hear Drake's voice; he kept telling me to keep my mouth shut. His cold eyes reminded me of what happened. I shuddered and closed my eyes hoping to chase him away...) See something like that...lol :)

um......that's a lot to take in, thanks though your the only one that ever offers me advice about it

lol I know, but I like being detailed when it comes to advice and you're welcome..can't wait for the next chapter

okay then thanks guys

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